Welcome to Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday. On the surface, it’s a web ring of authors who post snippets of their work for comment. In reality, it’s a close-knit group of friends and colleagues working together to support and encourage one another and promote the science fiction and fantasy genres.
I’m back, with a new snippet!
This is from The Jade Star of Athering, sequel to Bellica. It’s currently a work in progress. I expect to have it finished early next year.
They had taken their time on the trip south, and rode into town on the morning of the eighteenth. It looked deserted – a veritable ghost town. As Bellica Agate slowed her horse to a walk she felt a cold stone settle into her gut at the senses of her hometown. There was no sound of children playing, no smell of fresh bread baking, no laundry hung out to dry – she couldn’t even feel the heat of the day on her skin or taste the desert eucalyptus that grew in and around town year-round.
She held back a shiver and dismounted her horse, signaling for Damien to do the same. They’d look less of a threat.
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(If you want to read the first 11 chapters of Bellica you can do so here. My short fiction and poetry can be found here, and my Smoke and Shadows stories can be found here.)
Great description through the use of absence…enjoyed it.
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Thank you. 🙂
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Not a good sign when your hometown is deserted. Welcome back!
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Thanks Patrick! I’m stoked to be participating again; I missed this all summer. 🙂
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Hey, Katje!
Going by that last line, I’m assuming there are people in the town. I sense something bad has happened… or is about to!
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*waves* Hi Gayle!
Yep, there are people in the town. And something bad has happened. Whether what’s about to happen is bad or not depends on your perspective. 🙂
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I immediately pictured this, and now, curious to learn more and what happened to the town!!
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Woo! That’s what I want to hear. 😀
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I think you’re talking about what her senses are picking up of her hometown, not its senses. But the description is good.
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Ah, yeah. This is all raw, first draft stuff, so it hasn’t yet been touched by my editor. 🙂
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It sounds like there’s no-one there to consider them a threat at all. Spooky!
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What’s even spookier is who IS there! 😀
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This gave me chills, and I want to know what happened. Can’t wait to read more!
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You’ll have to wait and see! …though, at this point, only a couple of hours. Next snippet coming up soon. 🙂
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This is immediately absorbing. I love the way you shaped the scene: great details.
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Thank you!
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